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Punchy Prose

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Herein you'll find a list of words I watch for in my writing, to replace/remove for stronger prose. Thought you might find it useful!

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Adverbs

I replace these and the accompanying verb with something more impactful.
  • abruptly
  • absently
  • adamantly
  • affectionately
  • aimlessly
  • angrily
  • anxiously
  • ardently
  • arrogantly
  • awkwardly
  • badly
  • bashfully
  • bitterly
  • blindly
  • boldly
  • breathlessly
  • briskly
  • brusquely
  • carefully
  • casually
  • cautiously
  • cheerfully
  • clearly
  • cleverly
  • coldly
  • comfortably
  • confidently
  • consciously
  • constantly
  • coolly
  • coyly
  • cruelly
  • curiously
  • darkly
  • deeply
  • defiantly
  • deliberately
  • desperately
  • determinedly
  • diligently
  • dimly
  • discreetly
  • distantly
  • dramatically
  • dreamily
  • eagerly
  • easily
  • eerily
  • elegantly
  • emotionally
  • emphatically
  • endlessly
  • evenly
  • eventually
  • exactly
  • excitedly
  • expectantly
  • expertly
  • faintly
  • faithfully
  • fearfully
  • fiercely
  • firmly
  • fondly
  • foolishly
  • forcefully
  • fortunately
  • frantically
  • freely
  • furiously
  • gently
  • gladly
  • gracefully
  • greedily
  • grimly
  • grudgingly
  • happily
  • harshly
  • hastily
  • helplessly
  • hesitantly
  • hopelessly
  • hungrily
  • hurriedly
  • hysterically
  • icily
  • impatiently
  • impassively
  • incessantly
  • incredulously
  • inevitably
  • innocently
  • instantly
  • intensely
  • intentionally
  • irritably
  • joyfully
  • keenly
  • lazily
  • lightly
  • listlessly
  • longingly
  • loudly
  • lovingly
  • loyally
  • madly
  • meaningfully
  • mechanically
  • menacingly
  • miserably
  • mockingly
  • mysteriously
  • naively
  • naturally
  • nervously
  • nonchalantly
  • numbly
  • obediently
  • obnoxiously
  • oddly
  • ominously
  • openly
  • painfully
  • particularly
  • patiently
  • patronizingly
  • perfectly
  • playfully
  • politely
  • powerfully
  • precisely
  • proudly
  • protectively
  • quickly
  • quietly
  • rapidly
  • rashly
  • reluctantly
  • reproachfully
  • resolutely
  • restlessly
  • reverently
  • rigidly
  • ruefully
  • ruthlessly
  • sadly
  • sarcastically
  • scornfully
  • searchingly
  • seductively
  • selfishly
  • sensibly
  • seriously
  • sharply
  • sheepishly
  • shrewdly
  • shyly
  • silently
  • sleepily
  • slowly
  • slyly
  • softly
  • solemnly
  • somberly
  • soothingly
  • speedily
  • stiffly
  • strangely
  • stubbornly
  • suavely
  • suddenly
  • suspiciously
  • swiftly
  • sympathetically
  • tactfully
  • tearfully
  • tenderly
  • tensely
  • thoughtfully
  • tightly
  • timidly
  • tirelessly
  • triumphantly
  • truthfully
  • uneasily
  • unexpectedly
  • unhappily
  • unnaturally
  • urgently
  • vaguely
  • vainly
  • valiantly
  • venomously
  • viciously
  • violently
  • warily
  • warmly
  • weakly
  • wearily
  • wickedly
  • wistfully
  • woefully
  • wildly
  • wisely
  • wistfully
  • wordlessly
  • wrathfully
  • wretchedly

Cliches

Time for something more inventive!
  • a far cry
  • as if on queue
  • as if struck
  • beg to differ
  • blood sweat and tears
  • blood ran cold
  • bone dry
  • built to last
  • calm before the storm
  • chip in
  • couldn't resist a grin
  • deal with it
  • deep in thought
  • eyes grew distant
  • figure it out
  • first things first
  • force of nature
  • foul play
  • get lost
  • got that look
  • heart jumped into/to her/his/their throat
  • hell to pay
  • hit the ground running
  • keep it up
  • mind a whirlwind
  • off-kilter
  • on the nose
  • on track
  • on to something
  • out of it
  • over the edge
  • painted an interesting picture
  • pay attention
  • pride and joy
  • raised alarm bells
  • shadow crossed her/his/their face
  • seen better days
  • see the light
  • sigh of relief
  • slipped through my fingers
  • thank goodness
  • throwing up her/his/their hands
  • try as i might
  • with more force than necessary

Conjunction Sentence Starters

Starting a sentence with these is good, as long as I don't do it too often!
  • Also
  • And
  • As
  • Because
  • Before
  • Besides
  • But
  • By the time
  • For
  • If
  • Instead
  • Once
  • Only
  • Or
  • Since
  • Still
  • Though
  • Until
  • When
  • Which
  • While
  • Yet

Filler Words

Just one word for these: delete!
  • absolutely
  • actually
  • a bit of
  • a little
  • almost
  • altogether
  • apparently
  • at all
  • basically
  • barely
  • beginning to
  • began to
  • begun to
  • but of course
  • certainly
  • clearly
  • completely
  • continued to
  • decide to
  • decided to
  • definitely
  • easily
  • even
  • exactly
  • fairly
  • felt like
  • finally
  • fully
  • had to
  • happened to
  • hardly
  • I guess
  • I mean
  • I suppose
  • in order to
  • in the middle of
  • in the process of
  • it was
  • just
  • just then
  • kind of
  • let alone
  • like
  • literally
  • managed to
  • maybe
  • merely
  • nearly
  • needed to
  • obviously
  • okay
  • own
  • perhaps
  • practically
  • probably
  • quite
  • rather
  • really
  • seem
  • seemed
  • seemed to
  • simply
  • slightly
  • so
  • somewhat
  • sort of
  • sort of
  • started to
  • suddenly
  • tended to
  • that
  • the fact that
  • then
  • there was
  • totally
  • truly
  • tried to
  • utterly
  • very
  • virtually
  • wanted to
  • was able to
  • was going to
  • well
  • you know

Generic Descriptions

Can I put my vast vocabulary to use?
  • big
  • good
  • great
  • large
  • look
  • looked
  • looks
  • low
  • main
  • nice
  • powerful
  • pretty
  • serious
  • special

Passive Voice

Let the narrative and characters drive the story, not the sentence.
  • affected by
  • are being
  • are seen
  • are thought
  • are understood
  • can be
  • could be
  • has been
  • have been
  • is believed
  • is considered
  • is expected
  • is felt
  • is given
  • is heard
  • is hoped
  • is known
  • is meant
  • is noticed
  • is perceived
  • is questioned
  • is remembered
  • is said
  • is seen
  • is shown
  • is supposed
  • is taken
  • is understood
  • it appears
  • it has been
  • it is believed
  • it is considered
  • it is expected
  • it is known
  • it is said
  • it is shown
  • it seems
  • it was
  • it will be
  • may be
  • might be
  • must be
  • ought to be
  • shall be
  • should be
  • to be
  • was being
  • was believed
  • was considered
  • was expected
  • was felt
  • was given
  • was heard
  • was hoped
  • was known
  • was meant
  • was noticed
  • was perceived
  • was questioned
  • was remembered
  • was said
  • was seen
  • was shown
  • was supposed
  • was taken
  • was thought
  • was understood
  • were being
  • were believed
  • were considered
  • were expected
  • were felt
  • were given
  • were heard
  • were hoped
  • were known
  • were meant
  • were noticed
  • were perceived
  • were questioned
  • were remembered
  • were said
  • were seen
  • were shown
  • were supposed
  • were taken
  • were thought
  • were understood
  • will be
  • would be

Redundancies

I only need one of these words to get the point across.
  • absolutely certain
  • absolutely essential
  • actual experience
  • advance notice
  • advance planning
  • advance preview
  • advance warning
  • ascend up
  • ask a question
  • at this moment in time
  • at this point in time
  • basic essentials
  • basic fundamentals
  • brief moment
  • brief second
  • burning fire
  • close proximity
  • collaborate together
  • completely annihilate
  • completely destroyed
  • completely finished
  • consensus of opinion
  • continue on
  • could possibly
  • descend down
  • each and every
  • end result
  • enter in
  • exact duplicate
  • exact same
  • false pretense
  • final conclusion
  • final outcome
  • first and foremost
  • foreign imports
  • free gift
  • frozen ice
  • future plans
  • general consensus
  • green in color
  • join together
  • kneel down
  • lag behind
  • major breakthrough
  • merge together
  • mix together
  • mutual cooperation
  • mutual respect
  • new discovery
  • new innovation
  • new invention
  • past experience
  • past history
  • personal opinion
  • plan ahead
  • proceed forward
  • rare privilege
  • ready and waiting
  • reason why
  • repeat again
  • return back
  • revert back
  • rise up
  • safe haven
  • same exact
  • separate apart
  • serious crisis
  • short summary
  • shut down
  • small in size
  • still remains
  • sudden impulse
  • sum total
  • surrounded on all sides
  • unexpected surprise
  • usual habit
  • very unique
  • visible to the eye
  • warn in advance
  • written down

Telling Indicators

Can I show this so readers can infer it instead? What'd make it more descriptive/engaging?
  • could
  • feel
  • feeling
  • felt
  • get
  • hear
  • heard
  • knew
  • know
  • known
  • notice
  • noticed
  • observed
  • saw
  • see
  • tastes
  • there
  • watched

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